Thursday, June 17, 2021

Behind in Hawaii with my Family I would like to stay back in hawaiki Because I feel like I should hunt for for land land for food for you and my family I think I am responsible enough to stay back and do all of the work to help you and my family I really don't want to go as I get really very sick and I would be no help to everyone I need to stay on the island because I was like to go and discover new things about our Island thanks for reading and you're the time record
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5 comments:

  1. AustinJune 17, 2021 at 11:36 AM

    Hi willam I like your writing and amybe could you do some paragraphs

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  2. AnonymousJune 17, 2021 at 11:39 AM

    Hi willam did you forget the title and can you add a bit more detail please
    create writing your I really like it. can you do the paragraphs please.
    From Levi S

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  3. Reuben WalshJune 17, 2021 at 11:40 AM

    Hi William awesome piece of writing yes I agree with Austin maybe put in some paragraphs and a goal to but everything else is amazing.

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  4. AnonymousJune 17, 2021 at 11:42 AM

    Hi William, I really like this and it has a lot of information about why you want to stay, but it would make it a lot better if you were able to put some paragraphs to space it out. From Jade

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  5. AnonymousJune 17, 2021 at 11:48 AM

    hi William that's a great piece of writing their just think you need to start paragraphing.

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